h.w #17

I like your thesis, I think there good enough and you don’t need to change them, and the argument are strong and good, am tell you some stuff that u can say or add on argument one like “ u can say people success more on other places when they don’t use that much of technology because they have more time to do other stuff and just even try them and see how good they are and if they would like it or not.
And about argument 2, if you need to ask anything about how there is in the middle east or an questions id be able to answer and help! But id be good 2 if mention that “ iif they have those stuff they’d probably be bad as teen of America”
Argument 3; u can connect argument 3 to what u said, that you got jelouse from your parents or you wanted to do it even more, to have an email and hear that “ you have a new mail” that’s it was your family fault in some how, and then you can say that we weren’t that young when we started using digital devices and we got that addicted on using it after 3 or 4 years, how is the kids that started using it while there 4 or 5 years how bad are they gonna be in the future? And how is that going to help are future to get better and get the world to a better place?